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Tightrope Walker

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I grasp the cold
bars in my hands,
and tightly close
my eyes...  my mind...  my heart.

I step up the rungs,
one at a time,
as fast as my feet can
take me...  let me...  make me.

I reach the absolute
top of the world,
and I feel my heart
beating...  racing...  stopping.

I spread my arms wide
as far as I can,
and pretend I'm
flying...  soaring... escaping.

I take a small
step forward.
and feel the rope
sag...  stretch...  snap.

I keep steady
while I walk,
and feel myself
twitch...  sway...  shake.

I hold my breath
and shut my eyes
as I imagine myself
slipping...  falling...  dying.

I catch myself before
I lose all control,
and I try to keep
walking...  breathing...  living.

I reach the other side
as I fall to my knees
and I look back to see
my accomplishment...  my success...  my past.

I feel the blood
flowing back to my face
and I know I am
smiling...  grinning...  laughing.
What do you all think?

Is the basis of it too clichéd?
Did I make a lot of grammatical errors?
Does it flow properly?
Do the ellipses make it look disjointed?
Does the double subscripts work?
Are the words still legible?
Does the story even make sense?


Critiques please :)
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